A Poem About Breaking Up Without Bitterness
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I Don't Consider Myself a Poet, But ...
I wrote this poem over 10 years ago as a way of expressing the sorrow I felt at the breakup of a relationship. I wasn't really trying to write poetry so much as I was trying to understand why the breakup occurred and not be bitter about it. Needless to say, I lost touch with this person, never to hear from him again, but I do have fond memories of that time in my life.
I know poetry doesn't have to rhyme, but I like it when it does. And I don't know the technical name for such poetry, hence I couldn't categorize it (e.g., lyrical, ode, haiku ... well, I know enough to know it isn't haiku) other than to say it's poetry. Okay, okay, enough stalling. Here it is ...
Open Heart
My heart is open
For you and for me.
Love comes from a Source
That’s eternal and free.
Sometimes it hurts,
And when I feel the pain,
The temptation is great
To close my heart again.
But I remember your smile,
The gentle look in your eyes,
The times that you held me
When I wanted to cry.
It’s easy to say
It’s your fault, no, it’s mine.
But why search for blame.
There’s really no crime.
I want you to know
That love never dies.
I feel it in your touch;
It’s sheltered in your eyes.
And though we have parted
And this seems like the end.
My heart remains open,
Love will touch it again.
By Patrice Walker, (c) 1997
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Nice poem. Did you really copyright that? I never had anything copyright. Just curious:)
Thanks, Adrienne!
Hi tim-tim, thanks for your comment, and no, I didn't officially copyright it, but my understanding is that if you write it, it's automatically copyrighted. I added it here because that's how it appeared in my file copy. I've noticed that some people add a copyright statement to their hubs. It's an interesting question. There's probably some talk about it in the forums. Thanks for reading it!
Thank you dear for a very lovely poem, I appreciate you. Godspeed. creativeone59
Thanks creativeone59!
"In all countries where the Berne Convention standards apply, copyright is automatic, and need not be obtained through official registration with any government office." (Source: Wikipedia). United States of Amnerica are also a contracting party.
I don't get the poll, Patrice, especially the meaning of the first answer. Where's "Nice poem. I like it.?"
I'm not sure I understand your copyright comment, vox vocis, but the poll refers to the poem above it. It was my attempt at a little tongue-in-cheek humor.
Oh wait ... maybe it's the copyright notice right below the poll. That, my photo and the request for comments etc is a photo that I started placing at the end of all my hubs. Perhaps the poll right above it is an awkward place to put it. Is that what you were referring to??
Hahaha :) A misunderstanding! My copyright comment refers to tim-tim's comment and your reply to him/her; I wanted to confirm what you replied. The copyright photo is an excellent choice because it's better than writing the notice as part of the article (in terms of SEO).
Everything is fine with the poll placement, it's just that there's no option for a positive answer (or am I misunderstanding sth? LOL)
Oh, okay Jasmine, I see now. Didn't realize you were referring to Tim-Tim's comment.
As for the photo, that's exactly why I'm using it and not a final paragraph of text. A hubber friend, writeronline, told me about it how that final copyright text messes up your on-page SEO.
As for the poll, the positive option response is the first one. A little American humor for "yes, I'm a poet, with a rhyme included in the sentence to prove it. Hope that makes sense.
beautiful poem its nice
Hello jesusmyjoy! It seems the poems I write (rarely) come out of some feeling I'm experiencing at the time. Wish I could just whip them out on command :-). I really appreciate your positive feedback! Thanks for stopping by and commenting.
Interesting take on the relationship break up game. I call it a game of sorts, because many people jump in and out of them like they changing video game disks, or also known as video game cartridges many years back.
People who have no real feelings for one another from the very start, pretty much are playing a game as well, and it makes it tough to make decisions if only one person was playing but the other was serious as ever.
The sad truth is we all must part some day & surely when things are steering towards the worst.
Lovely poem and it brought a few memories back of my first love, whom I had to break up with due to many reasons I can't share though.
Voted up indeed, I thought it was beautiful.
Not sure why people aren't clicking them rating buttons but I did, because you truly deserved it @PWalker.
Thamks for the praise, CE. The poem is a bit corny, if you ask me, but it was the way I was feeling at the time I wrote it.
I think the quality of a breakup, no matter the reason for splitting, will in part determine the success of the next relationship. Part in bitterness and you take that energy into the next relationship. Part in forgiveness and love, and those qualities will define the new relationship.
Thanks for reading and commenting, CE!
Adrienne 2 years ago
Touching poem!!